One of the big things with poems like these is the flow and connection with the two verses, something you should work on.
-you have the first verse with 6 lines, then (unnecessarily, I might add) have the second one containing 7.
--your 4th and 5th line in your first verse are very to the point, while the corresponding lines in the following verse are dancing around an action and are drawn out.
-you have literally no connection for your verses. I understand you are shooting towards the recognizing of nature and its beauty, but you jump from gazing at the stars (actually, just gazing at our sun..which is just plain odd) to gazing in the woods. And on top of it, you mention the single star, which I can only infer means our sun...this then begs the questions as to 1) why you are staring at the sun? And 2) why the animals of the forest are sleeping with the sun out?
Like I said, I understand what you are striving for, but the structure of the work makes it come across very clunky and forced, while the subject matter falls on inconsistencies
(P.S. if you couldn't guess from my statement, there is no reason to break up "knowing the animals are asleep" like you did)
