I had a thread a long time ago, but it pretty much died since I wasnt contributing to it at all for a while. So I am going to try to stick with this one, updating it regularly.
I think I will start this new thread with a poem I wrote last week.
A blank façade Covers a complex painting Vast and solid Internally filled with riddles I cannot find purchase On its silky smooth surface But when I manage a handhold I will be face to face with her soul
Not Without Will The battle between good and evil is only a fight to keep the balance.
Prologue "Assimilate. There is no identity for the weak. I am your strength, your mind, and the thoughts you think belong to me. Every step you take is in the direction I steer you towards, and every breath you breathe is evidence of my mercy. You deserve nothing, yet I give it all to you."
The hastily assembled army stood in silence as "bad dude's" amplified voice fades. He looked out among the faces of his emaciated people, his cold grey eyes passing over me as though I was but an inconsequential speck on this world in which he ruled. The young and the old swayed in unison around me, eyes wide and mouths gaping. Controlling people was effortless for him. They were more than willing to be led, weaklings with less power over themselves than a simple animal. They could be taught tricks: to fetch, to sit, to kill, as it suits him. With the sound of his voice and the press of his mind he has sent hundreds to war. The only trouble he ever had came from the few pests among these people who would begin to think for themselves. His gaze would linger upon these people, and he would make a note to himself. They would be 'handled' before the end of the night.
"I understand you are hungry, and I can see your fatigue in every movement you make; but this is no excuse," he said, voice rising, "for you to disobey me! You know who I am. I am your leader!"
Each word he laced with his will, and the assembled crowd had bowed in deference. The strongest of these minds fought his power, but I could feel them succumb as he finished.
"You are one. My children, you shall wish for my happiness. You will not question my authority, and you will not disrespect me, lest death be your goal!"
The cool evening air thrummed with the power his voice evoked, and I watched him from my supplicating position as the setting sun sent a bloody cast over the land. I saw his composure begin to crumble. Already he was being afflicted by one of the piercing headaches that so frequently accompanied these speeches he made. It isn't easy to spread the power of one mind, albeit superior, over such a large expanse, and it made him weak.
I am of his kind. I am the only other mind bender like him, and as my gaunt campmates and I stood, I knew it was time to end his tyrannical rule. Reaching out with my mind, I encircled his and constricted. There was a great mental struggle, his mind and mine clashing, barbed wire against the untainted expanse of my consciousness. His eyes were clouded as I watched him fall. I could no longer feel his mental presence, and the camp was in pandemonium. This is it.
I walked with legs made of lead to where he was laying upon his makeshift stage, senseless. No longer would he oppress us, no longer would he send us to risk our lives for his gratification. These were my thoughts, when everything went black.
You said it's a prologue, so is Chapter one going back in time to explain how that character got in that situation? Or are you doing the complete opposite and skipping ahead in the future? Or are you just going to pick the story up from where the prologue left off? Or do you have no clear idea yet? Or kittens? Choose wisely.
I dont want to give everything away! :S Chapter one is going to explain why the as-of-yet unnamed protagonist got into the situation hes in. The story is going to switch between him and this "sidekick" who has heard of bad dudes tyrannic way of ruling his people. So sidekick and hero meet in a retelling of the prologue from the sidekicks view. Then from that point the story will continue with sidekick and hero dude trying to (omitted for suspense).
Um ok then... I'll try to update my novel at least once a week. I'm not going to promise though because I want it to be good and you cant rush goodness:3
I suppose its more like medieval, but they people in the story don't consider it to be, of course. This all "happened" around the time Julius Caesar was in power.
I suppose its more like medieval, but they people in the story don't consider it to be, of course. This all "happened" around the time Julius Caesar was in power.
A time period isn't really needed at all because there are similar harsh rulers in every era. Perhaps instead of giving a time setting outright, mention weapons or items that would gradually date the storyline to the iron age.
Yeah, I also dont have a name for the antagonist yet. I'm calling him "bad dude". Idk its a work in progress.
Sounds cool Both are sinister sounding. I wasnt planning on giving an exact date, since there wasnt really a solid grasp of time back then, but I plan on the content alluding to the time.
Charlie, I love you You are my best friend. A life was lost, A sad, early end. Hold on for me Hold on for him It will be okay Just try to mend. The wreck was bad And left a lasting scar But dont let go of life Don't forget who you are.
A haiku is a 5-7-5 syllable pattern The dog is fluf*fy I like fluf*fy lit*tle dogs They are real*ly cute. See? Not that great of a haiku but it gets the point across. I have entered a poetry contest. I entered one when I was in grade 8, and I won 1st place out of the whole school. My poem got published in "Award Winning Young Writers of America," the 2009-2010 edition. Its on page one. I didnt win le grande prize, but I was excited to have it published nonetheless.
